I'm excited to see how you combined the earlier images this semester and combined it to this project to expand/change the meaning. The two images in which you put several images and texts together are very interesting to look at. There is some heavy influence from the 70s fashion photography project that you are taking in this one and I hope the rationale for the connection can be clearer. The two images with the shoe and the hand holding the pendant feel "too clean" and they don't bear that energy. I had hoped you took more action with the ripping of fishnet and the model in general. The words "i'm a punk feminist" does not match her look.
Although I like the idea of integrating text, I think that some of your text does not really fit. When you talked about your work, you said you drew inspiration from earlier artists who included statements such as I'm a punk feminist into their work, and although I think it is ok to do that, I agree with Hanyun that it does not really fit. I also think that it is a little too explicit, but that might just be my personal taste. I was a little disappointed when you said that the photo at the bottom right of your presentation was just included as an extra, because I really liked how it complemented the photo right next to it. I really liked that you put two photos that were the same but that you had edited in different ways right next to each other, it created a nice texture and repetition. -Christoffer.
These almost look like some sort of makeup/lipstick ad to me, which is ironic with the message you're sending. Your detail/close up shots are very effective, sharp, and have a great composition–we can see your improvement. While I love your overall lighting and white balance, I think you could push the glam/girlie/punk look further by doing some tearing or photoshop effects to the edges of the photos. To add to what Christoffer said, I think it'd be interesting to see those sort of "manufactured" words over again (the ones on the side of the lower right two photos) because it adds a neat effect.
I really like the photos in which another photo is superimposed on top. In particular, I think the third image is really striking. The window with the woman in front of it makes me wonder if she is looking through a window, jumping out of one, just hanging out... it is pretty thought provoking. The image of the necklace that reads "Identity" seems a bit expected for lack of a better word. I feel like maybe if there had been some other text that provoked the idea of identity- it might have been more interesting for the viewer. As far as an overall series, I see this almost as a jumping off point for the next/another project. I think there are great ideas, with the overlaying, experimentation with text, etc. and I know that this is the most annoying expression ever, but I really think that these are good ideas worth "pushing further."
I think these photos have great compositions and the lighting is really good. You've definitely come a long way since your first project. The written text is really powerful for me, but I'm not so crazy about the text done in photoshop. Also, I agree with Mariel that the text is a little too expected and helps the reader too much. I don't think it's necessary to give that much information. The photoshopped images are great and I think you should keep going with those!
i like the idea of integrating text, but i don't really understand he implications of it in this series, it doesn't really compliment the images like i think you intended. i really like the editing of the fourth image, and would like to see it in other places as well. it creates an interesting layer and meaning that is stronger than the textual meaning. as for the relationship to punk, i'm having a difficult time finding it...i think you should edit out the image of the hand, it doesn't allow for the viewer to interpret much, since it tells you what to think, but the other images are more mysterious, which i like. you did a good job editing, white balance, etc, i know you spent a lot of time on them. kirslyn
First off, I like the incorporation of text. For the most part it strengthens the work as a whole. However, I feel that the one that says "identity" does not coincide with the actual image. Also something about the lighting in these photographs, while they demonstrate your ability to produced photos with good light balance, do not fit the theme of the work. Perhaps if the images were shot in a darker light, they would better convey your meaning. Good job! -Ali
These photos have a great crisp, clean quality to them, which definitely shows that you've succeeded in lighting and white balance. I think I'm still a little trippped up on the "punk feminist" idea though, because without your explanation and the words I don't think I would've immediately gotten that point. I really like the one with her face in the background though- combining those elements made your idea appear stronger. ~Emily
I think those photos showed your great progress from your first assignment. Great job!! As many people said I really like the fourth image too and I wish you could have played with photoshop more and experiment with image over wrapping and text and creating different effect and atmosphere from photos that you took. For the hands with text. You might did it purposely to make it kinda "undone," but it really looks "undone" and may be you should have worked more on that part.
I'm excited to see how you combined the earlier images this semester and combined it to this project to expand/change the meaning. The two images in which you put several images and texts together are very interesting to look at. There is some heavy influence from the 70s fashion photography project that you are taking in this one and I hope the rationale for the connection can be clearer.
ReplyDeleteThe two images with the shoe and the hand holding the pendant feel "too clean" and they don't bear that energy. I had hoped you took more action with the ripping of fishnet and the model in general. The words "i'm a punk feminist" does not match her look.
Although I like the idea of integrating text, I think that some of your text does not really fit. When you talked about your work, you said you drew inspiration from earlier artists who included statements such as I'm a punk feminist into their work, and although I think it is ok to do that, I agree with Hanyun that it does not really fit. I also think that it is a little too explicit, but that might just be my personal taste.
ReplyDeleteI was a little disappointed when you said that the photo at the bottom right of your presentation was just included as an extra, because I really liked how it complemented the photo right next to it. I really liked that you put two photos that were the same but that you had edited in different ways right next to each other, it created a nice texture and repetition.
-Christoffer.
These almost look like some sort of makeup/lipstick ad to me, which is ironic with the message you're sending. Your detail/close up shots are very effective, sharp, and have a great composition–we can see your improvement. While I love your overall lighting and white balance, I think you could push the glam/girlie/punk look further by doing some tearing or photoshop effects to the edges of the photos. To add to what Christoffer said, I think it'd be interesting to see those sort of "manufactured" words over again (the ones on the side of the lower right two photos) because it adds a neat effect.
ReplyDeleteI really like the photos in which another photo is superimposed on top. In particular, I think the third image is really striking. The window with the woman in front of it makes me wonder if she is looking through a window, jumping out of one, just hanging out... it is pretty thought provoking. The image of the necklace that reads "Identity" seems a bit expected for lack of a better word. I feel like maybe if there had been some other text that provoked the idea of identity- it might have been more interesting for the viewer. As far as an overall series, I see this almost as a jumping off point for the next/another project. I think there are great ideas, with the overlaying, experimentation with text, etc. and I know that this is the most annoying expression ever, but I really think that these are good ideas worth "pushing further."
ReplyDeleteI think these photos have great compositions and the lighting is really good. You've definitely come a long way since your first project. The written text is really powerful for me, but I'm not so crazy about the text done in photoshop. Also, I agree with Mariel that the text is a little too expected and helps the reader too much. I don't think it's necessary to give that much information. The photoshopped images are great and I think you should keep going with those!
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i like the idea of integrating text, but i don't really understand he implications of it in this series, it doesn't really compliment the images like i think you intended. i really like the editing of the fourth image, and would like to see it in other places as well. it creates an interesting layer and meaning that is stronger than the textual meaning. as for the relationship to punk, i'm having a difficult time finding it...i think you should edit out the image of the hand, it doesn't allow for the viewer to interpret much, since it tells you what to think, but the other images are more mysterious, which i like.
ReplyDeleteyou did a good job editing, white balance, etc, i know you spent a lot of time on them.
kirslyn
First off, I like the incorporation of text. For the most part it strengthens the work as a whole. However, I feel that the one that says "identity" does not coincide with the actual image. Also something about the lighting in these photographs, while they demonstrate your ability to produced photos with good light balance, do not fit the theme of the work. Perhaps if the images were shot in a darker light, they would better convey your meaning. Good job!
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These photos have a great crisp, clean quality to them, which definitely shows that you've succeeded in lighting and white balance. I think I'm still a little trippped up on the "punk feminist" idea though, because without your explanation and the words I don't think I would've immediately gotten that point. I really like the one with her face in the background though- combining those elements made your idea appear stronger.
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I think those photos showed your great progress from your first assignment. Great job!! As many people said I really like the fourth image too and I wish you could have played with photoshop more and experiment with image over wrapping and text and creating different effect and atmosphere from photos that you took. For the hands with text. You might did it purposely to make it kinda "undone," but it really looks "undone" and may be you should have worked more on that part.
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